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Title: Dialysis Song
Post by: Ken Shelmerdine on November 25, 2007, 10:09:31 AM
Is anyone interested in posting some lyric suggestions for a song I want to write about dialysis?  I am at present writing material for an album and I want to put at least one song on it which deals with dialysis and what it means to have kidney failure. 

I've mentioned previously that my hobby is writing and recording my own songs. Although it takes me ages to come up with good lyrics I usually get there in the end. but strangely enough I'm struggling with this one and would really appreciate some help

The song will be called 'Blood Machine' and all I've got so far is part of the chorus.
 ;musicalnote;
'Blood machine keep my body clean
Be good to me tonight'
 ;musicalnote;
I'm looking for something gritty and earthy with some irony. I'll add personal credits on the album cover for any one's  lyrics that I use. Unfortunately no money credits as I'm not famous so the album won't be on commercial release. When I finish the song I'll put it on Y-tube or some media site where anyone interested in hearing it could access it.

So come on all you wordsmiths out there, bring it on!
All contributions gratefully received.

Edited: Fixed smiley - okarol/moderator
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: kitkatz on November 25, 2007, 11:35:00 AM
When do I get to have fun?
When life gets to be too much
and I can’t handle it anymore
 I have to run in circles and scream
 I have to stand and scream it out.
But that is stress relief
Not fun.
Where is the fun?
I miss the fun.

Ring around the Rosie
Hopscotch
Blowing bubbles in the sunlight
Rolling down a grassy hill
With the sun beating down.
Playing tag.
Barefoot, summertime, till after dark.
Dozing off under a shady tree
With a book beside you.
Picnic basket shared with friends.
Now that is fun!

Dialysis, sharp needles
Blood running from pump to body.
Cold buildings.
Nurses, techs, dietitians, social workers.
Bills piling up
Because you cannot work anymore.
Medicare, social security, paperwork,
Just to get by.
Chronic Illness in my life.
Death looking over my shoulder.
This is not fun!

Watching movies on a personal DVD player.
Drinking an ice cold Cola.
Crunching on a cup of cold ice.
Reading a book from cover to cover.
Putting a warm pack under a blanket.
Talking to people who really care.
Headphones that block out the noise.
A TV that works, with cable channels.
Days on dialysis can be good
Sometimes.




But I still miss the fun
Spontaneity
The ability to pick up and go
Travel where I want
When I want to
Go and do and be
Whenever and however I want.
Now I have to plan it all out
Be sure to schedule and plan my life.
Fun has to be planned now.

It is the price I pay
For life.


K. Soto and Okarol  4/28/2007

Use whatever you want out of it.
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Romona on November 25, 2007, 12:17:52 PM
I would love to hear your song when you are done. I have slow dial up and my computer isn't fast, so I don't know if I'll be able to hear it that way. But if you become famous with your music, don't forget your princesses. We will pose wearing our tiaras to be on the front cover of your CD.  :rofl; :rofl; :rofl; We can be your Kidney Kweens.  :rofl; :rofl; Kidney Kuties!,  :bandance; :bandance;
Sorry I'm no help.
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: kellyt on November 25, 2007, 12:41:04 PM
Blood machine keep my body clean.
Be good to me tonight.
Make no sound - no alarms or bells.
I have no energy to fight.


????????????????????

I'm not creative!  lol 

Nor am I on dialysis, yet!  This should be fun!
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: okarol on November 25, 2007, 12:49:46 PM

Light fluorescent overhead
Let me have some rest
Hours sitting to be bled
Patience is my test

 :popcorn;
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: kellyt on November 25, 2007, 01:04:18 PM
ooooh...that's good, O'Karol!   :clap;
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: paris on November 25, 2007, 04:47:12 PM
Romona, I am shining my tiara so it will be ready for the cover of Ken's best selling CD! 

Ken, I want to hear it when it is done.  Can we have a preview party online? :2thumbsup;
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Romona on November 25, 2007, 06:58:19 PM
Quote from: paris on November 25, 2007, 04:47:12 PM
Romona, I am shining my tiara so it will be ready for the cover of Ken's best selling CD!

Ken, I want to hear it when it is done. Can we have a preview party online? :2thumbsup;
Paris dust off your go-go boots and mini skirt. We are off to London to be back up singers! :bandance;

Ken. I know you think we are staulking you, we're not. We are groupies!!  :bow; :bow;
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Ken Shelmerdine on November 26, 2007, 03:21:03 AM
Quote from: Romona on November 25, 2007, 12:17:52 PM
I would love to hear your song when you are done. I have slow dial up and my computer isn't fast, so I don't know if I'll be able to hear it that way. But if you become famous with your music, don't forget your princesses. We will pose wearing our tiaras to be on the front cover of your CD.  :rofl; :rofl; :rofl; We can be your Kidney Kweens.  :rofl; :rofl; Kidney Kuties!,  :bandance; :bandance;
Sorry I'm no help.

Practise your harmonies ladies, I'll get the tour bus ready! for KS and the Kidney Kweens! :rofl;
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Ken Shelmerdine on November 26, 2007, 03:25:34 AM
Thanks for the lyric suggestions there's plenty there I can work with but keep 'em coming. :thx; :thumbup;
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: paris on November 26, 2007, 07:01:44 AM
  :secret; Romona, do you think Ken has caught on to the fact that we have secret crushes on him?   It does look like we are stalkers!     ;musicalnote; Hmm,ahh, oohh ;musicalnote;  Just warming up! :rofl;

EDITED: Fixed smileys - okarol/moderator
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Romona on November 26, 2007, 09:12:08 AM
 :bandance; :bandance;
Until he has a restraining order, we are good to go!
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Ken Shelmerdine on November 27, 2007, 05:41:35 AM
 ::) Ladies ladies compose yourselves, I am a respectable married man who has lead a sheltered life and am no match for such worldly ladies as yourselves. I can see we will have to have separate dressing rooms on the concert tour. You can start looking for some stage outfits soon but I'm afraid you'll have to pay for them with your 5% share of the tour profits. How about a couple of those pointy boob tops that Madonna used to wear. ;D :rofl; :rofl;

Anyway  before this thread descends into another Brit thread fantatasy kingdom I'd like to stress to others reading this t that it REMAINS a serious attempt to gather good hard hitting lyrics...............Are you listening Paris and Romona?  ;) ;)
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: kitkatz on November 27, 2007, 03:21:19 PM
Okay I gave you some stuff. let me see what else I have rumbling around in the head. Feels empty today...Sigh.


I have a love hate relationship
It is not with any one person.
I have a date with a machine very other day.
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Aldente on November 27, 2007, 04:13:22 PM
Plastic and steel,
Wires and switches,
Hoses stretching to eternity.
Hope is real,
How do I feel?
Ask me a little later.
 
This pile of parts,
Honed and tuned,
Whir and thump, spin and pump.
Hope is real,
How do I feel?
Ask me a little later.

Fear and fretting,
Cold, then sweating,
Emotions ride a roller coaster.
Hope is real,
How do I feel?
Ask me a little later.


Cleans my blood,
Flushes my fluids,
Dialysis gives me a second chance.
Hope is real,
How do I feel?
Like there will be another tomorrow!
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: okarol on November 27, 2007, 04:20:39 PM
 :2thumbsup; Aldente - well done!
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: paris on November 27, 2007, 05:42:36 PM
That was great, Aldente!

Ken, I'm listening.   >:(   I have put myself in "timeout" for not following the rules!  My sincere apologies.
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Romona on November 27, 2007, 08:39:39 PM
 :oops; Our Kidneys made us do it! >:D >:D
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Ken Shelmerdine on November 28, 2007, 03:11:36 AM
Quote from: Romona on November 27, 2007, 08:39:39 PM
:oops; Our Kidneys made us do it! >:D >:D

 :rofl; :rofl;
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Ken Shelmerdine on November 28, 2007, 07:55:37 AM
Excellent :thumbup; I can certainly use a lot of what people have sent me so far and Aldante, there's a whole song there called 'Ask me Later' which I'll use as a separate song so now I'm hoping to have two songs. It will take some time because once I get the songs arranged in my head I'll start experimenting with with different production styles and then there's the studiop recording itself and dubbing all the instruments and then mixing etc but I will get there and you be able to hear the result in about six weeks time. Thanks for all your efforts, it's much appreciated. :clap; 
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Romona on November 28, 2007, 01:11:53 PM
I can not belive how quickly you are pulling this together.  :2thumbsup; :2thumbsup;
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: okarol on November 29, 2007, 04:42:23 PM
 ;musicalnote;

I need to be near you
Though I feel no attraction
Wish i could stay away
But I need your attention
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: kitkatz on November 29, 2007, 04:48:24 PM
Baby baby
a little machine
runs my life.

Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: KR Cincy on November 30, 2007, 06:57:08 AM
Pump it
Pump it real good...

wait...
I think I stole that
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Romona on November 30, 2007, 02:47:13 PM
Quote from: KR Cincy on November 30, 2007, 06:57:08 AM
Pump it
Pump it real good...

wait...
I think I stole that

I think it is push it......... :rofl;
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Ken Shelmerdine on November 30, 2007, 03:31:00 PM
Quote from: Romona on November 30, 2007, 02:47:13 PM
Quote from: KR Cincy on November 30, 2007, 06:57:08 AM
Pump it
Pump it real good...

wait...
I think I stole that

I think it is push it......... :rofl;

Romona your getting giddy again! Do you ever think of anything else?  :rofl; ;)
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Ken Shelmerdine on November 30, 2007, 04:10:57 PM
Well I wrote the song tonight. I've taken lines from the lyrics of Kitkatz and Aldante plus a few of my own. For those of you who sent lyrics in which haven't been used please don't be offended, I am so grateful for your interest and input. The song is a bit of a rant about what a pain in the arse dialysis is. I feel a little bit as if I am not really qualified to write lyrics like this because my symptoms are quite mild and I haven't yet experienced what some people on this forum have to put up with. As I've said in the song I can sympathize but can I really empathize until I start experiencing extreme symptoms? As I've said in previous posts 'I ain't seen nothing yet!'

Nevertheless I do read lots of posts and listen to what the posts say I've tried to reflect what people feel on this forum as best I can. And if you feel that I've hit the target I'll be well pleased.
So here are the Lyrics.

Blood Machine
written by Kitkatz Aldante And Ken Shelmerdine

Verse
DO YOU KNOW WHAT ITS LIKE?
DO YOU THINK I'M HAVIN' FUN?
DO YOU THINK I SLEEP AT NIGHT ?
NO WORRIES OF THE DAY TO COME
WELL YOU CAN SYMPATHIZE
BUT CAN YOU EMPATHIZE?
WITH EVERY DAY AND NIGHT SPENT
LOOKING DOWN THE BARREL OF A GUN

Chorus
THOUGH I GOT MY BLOOD MACHINE
KEEPING MY BODY CLEAN
I'LL NEVER BE LIKE YOU AGAIN
ME AND MY BLOOD MACHINE

2nd Verse
WIRES PLASTIC AND STEEL
STRETCHING TO ETERNITY
GIVES ME A SECOND CHANCE
BUT JUST DON'T ASK HOW I FEEL
I WANNA STAND ON A HILL
WITH A CUP OF COLD ICE
AND THE SUN BEATING DOWN
LAY MY BACK ON THE GROUND
WIN THE FIGHT

Repeat Chorus

Middle 8
PUT A WARM PACK UNDER MY BLANKET
TALK TO SOMEONE WHO KNOWS
BLOWING BUBBLES IN THE SUNLIGHT
PLAY A GAME IN THE SNOW

Repeat 1st Verse
Repeat chorus twice
End

I will record it over the next few weeks and then I have to figure out how to get it on Face Book. Watch this space!
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Romona on November 30, 2007, 04:30:56 PM
Quote from: Ken Shelmerdine on November 30, 2007, 03:31:00 PM
Quote from: Romona on November 30, 2007, 02:47:13 PM
Quote from: KR Cincy on November 30, 2007, 06:57:08 AM
Pump it
Pump it real good...

wait...
I think I stole that

I think it is push it......... :rofl;

Romona your getting giddy again! Do you ever think of anything else? :rofl; ;)


I am offended.  :rofl; There is a song here in the good old USA that goes "Ah push it, push it real good" :usaflag;
I think the other song is "pump up the jam".
I have no idea what they mean by it because I don't really remember all the words.
Can anyone else here defend my honor?  :angel;
Sluff? Joe Paul? Paris? Susie?


By the way that is a very good song. I am still amazed how quickly you all put it together.







EDITED: Fixed smiley error-kitkatz,moderator
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: paris on November 30, 2007, 04:41:06 PM
Love the song!!

Romona, with the history we have on the Brits dialysis thread, I fear we have no honor left to defend!! :rofl;
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: KR Cincy on November 30, 2007, 05:39:11 PM
Romona...I didn't mean to get you in to hot tea with Ken  hehe
There was Push It (Salt n Pepa I think)& there's a different one that is Pump Up The Jams, which I own but don't remember the performer.
So while I don't know what Romona is thinking all the time, THIS time it was music    :clap;
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Romona on November 30, 2007, 06:01:06 PM
Quote from: KR Cincy on November 30, 2007, 05:39:11 PM
Romona...I didn't mean to get you in to hot tea with Ken hehe
There was Push It (Salt n Pepa I think)& there's a different one that is Pump Up The Jams, which I own but don't remember the performer.
So while I don't know what Romona is thinking all the time, THIS time it was music :clap;
Whew! Thank you!  :clap;
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: KR Cincy on November 30, 2007, 06:06:46 PM
My pleasure.....
so.....
whatcha thinkin' about now?????

hehehe
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Romona on November 30, 2007, 06:11:18 PM
Mmmmmmmmmmmmmm Donuts! :rofl;
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Ken Shelmerdine on December 01, 2007, 04:32:28 AM
Quote from: Romona on November 30, 2007, 06:11:18 PM
Mmmmmmmmmmmmmm Donuts! :rofl;

Donuts......Am I missing something here, is this another one of your double entendres Romona :rofl;
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Romona on December 01, 2007, 04:48:29 PM
Quote from: Ken Shelmerdine on December 01, 2007, 04:32:28 AM
Quote from: Romona on November 30, 2007, 06:11:18 PM
Mmmmmmmmmmmmmm Donuts! :rofl;

Donuts......Am I missing something here, is this another one of your double entendres Romona :rofl;

It is just a quote from one of the greatest performers of both the small and big screen.

"Mmmmmmmmmmmmmm  Donuts!"

--Homer J. Simpson


 :rofl; :rofl; :rofl;
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Ken Shelmerdine on December 02, 2007, 02:54:50 PM
Quote from: Romona on December 01, 2007, 04:48:29 PM
Quote from: Ken Shelmerdine on December 01, 2007, 04:32:28 AM
Quote from: Romona on November 30, 2007, 06:11:18 PM
Mmmmmmmmmmmmmm Donuts! :rofl;

Donuts......Am I missing something here, is this another one of your double entendres Romona :rofl;

It is just a quote from one of the greatest performers of both the small and big screen.

"Mmmmmmmmmmmmmm  Donuts!"

--Homer J. Simpson


 :rofl; :rofl; :rofl;


 :oops; Sorry Romona, we do get the Simpsons here it's just that I never seem to get to watch it very often.
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Romona on December 03, 2007, 08:38:22 PM
Well I know Homer is no Benny Hill :rofl;, but you got to love him.
 Another great is KR Cincy's avitar Peter Griffin of Family Guy!

I am curious about your song writing. Have you made a lot of recordings?
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Ken Shelmerdine on December 04, 2007, 03:42:16 AM
Quote from: Romona on December 03, 2007, 08:38:22 PM
Well I know Homer is no Benny Hill :rofl;, but you got to love him.
 Another great is KR Cincy's avitar Peter Griffin of Family Guy!

I am curious about your song writing. Have you made a lot of recordings?

Yes quite a lot but there are only a few of them which I consider good enough to let other people hear. It's something I started doing a few years ago when I quit playing in bands. The material I am writing at the moment is for an album which I hope to put on facebook (if I can figure out how to do it) and the song Blood Machine will be included.
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Ken Shelmerdine on January 18, 2008, 05:29:40 AM
 :yahoo; I've finished the song. I want to put it on Facebook so that anyone who is interested can listen to it. I've signed up with my logon details but there doesn't seem to be any way to upload audio tracks. Can anyone help?
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: okarol on January 18, 2008, 08:40:27 AM
Quote from: Ken Shelmerdine on January 18, 2008, 05:29:40 AM
:yahoo; I've finished the song. I want to put it on Facebook so that anyone who is interested can listen to it. I've signed up with my logon details but there doesn't seem to be any way to upload audio tracks. Can anyone help?

Maybe you'll have to perform it on camera  :)
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Ken Shelmerdine on January 20, 2008, 05:52:37 AM
Right, I figured out how to do it. The song is on an audio upload site called 'Esnips' http://www.esnips.com/web/kenneth998-KensSongs

Click on the link above and it will bring you to a folder called 'Ken's Songs. Scroll down until you see 'Files' and then you'll see a title 'Blood Machine by Ken Shelmerdine. Click on this title and the page will change showing a media player. Click the start button on the player and you will hear the song.

I'm eventually going to edit the the credits of the song to include Kitkatz and Aldente because I took some of their lyric suggestions and put them in the song. I've tried to make the lyrics similar to the mood of many people on IHD who have a lot of shit to put up with. This comes over not only in people's posts but also in the lyric suggestions that many of you put forward. Thanks to all who contributed. Hope you like the song.
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Romona on January 20, 2008, 06:56:50 AM
I heard part of it. You have a wonderful voice. I have to get tech support (one of the kids ) to show me how to down load it right. I can only hear a few seconds at a time. It sound very professional. You are awesome Ken!  :2thumbsup;

Paris and I will be you first fan club. Don't forget Kitkatz and Goofynina.
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Romona on January 20, 2008, 10:41:01 AM
I heard the whole song. It took awhile for me to figure it out. I love it! You sound like Rodger Daultry or Pete Townshead.  ;musicalnote; :bandance;
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Ken Shelmerdine on January 20, 2008, 12:36:44 PM
Thanks Romona glad you like it. I'm just wondering if I should put the link on a new thread because I'm thinking that as people  look at the dialysis discussion list maybe they would skip past this one thinking that it was an old thread and  would not notice that it's been updated. What do you think?
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: rose1999 on January 20, 2008, 01:22:16 PM
Just heard it - I LOVE it!  :yahoo; Fantastic Ken  :clap; You've got a really nice voice, please don't be offended when I say I was very pleasantly surprised   :). 

You should contact your local BBC Radio and get some exposure, it's time more attention was given to dialysis in this country. Hey you could be the next No.1!!

To answer your question, yes I think it should have a thread all of its own.

Rose
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Romona on January 20, 2008, 01:33:09 PM
New link! I want to hear more of your stuff! :yahoo; :bow;
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Sluff on January 20, 2008, 07:38:51 PM
Pretty cool stuff there Sir Kenneth.  :thumbup;
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Cincygrandma on January 20, 2008, 08:20:18 PM
Wonderful!  As I post this I'm listening to Blood Machine for the 3rd time............I love it and it brings tears to my eyes as I listen.  Maybe because this is all so new to me........or maybe because it just sounds so good!  Consider me a fan!
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: jbeany on January 20, 2008, 09:50:25 PM
 :2thumbsup;
Nice job!
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Joe Paul on January 20, 2008, 11:44:04 PM
 :thumbup;
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: paris on January 21, 2008, 10:33:11 AM
Oh Sir Ken!  You are amazing!  The song is wonderful and I love the quality of your voice.  AlohaBeth loved it too.  It sounds so professional.   

Romona, we are now going to have to fight off the groupies!  I hope Ken remembers that we have been loyal subjects for quite some time (and forget the visa charges at Harrod's!!)
I am holding up my Bic lighter, waving my arms back and forth and ready to go on the road promoting Blood Machine.   :yahoo;
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Romona on January 21, 2008, 02:44:26 PM
Quote from: paris on January 21, 2008, 10:33:11 AM
Oh Sir Ken! You are amazing! The song is wonderful and I love the quality of your voice. AlohaBeth loved it too. It sounds so professional.

Romona, we are now going to have to fight off the groupies! I hope Ken remembers that we have been loyal subjects for quite some time (and forget the visa charges at Harrod's!!)
I am holding up my Bic lighter, waving my arms back and forth and ready to go on the road promoting Blood Machine. :yahoo;

Oh yeah! We have to keep those hussies away from our star. :boxing;

Ken, is there a way I can download the song so you can make me sweat.................I want to jam to it when I am exercising.  :bandance;

Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: LightLizard on January 21, 2008, 02:54:02 PM
great song ken! nice goin! and what a great collaboration on the lyrical end, gang.
 :2thumbsup; :clap; :clap; :clap;
Title: Re: Dialysis Song
Post by: Phurball on January 26, 2008, 05:18:49 AM
  :yahoo;   :clap;   :bow; Aldente !!!!  I love it !!!!!!!   :thx;